Well, after looking over my second draft I noticed there were a few edits here and there, but I had no idea how others would read it. After a few friends, outside my production group, read and sent feedback i began to get a little nervous. Their reactions a bit harsh, yet direct and constructive, which i needed! Here are what they said, “Static.”, “Needs a more central story.”, “Why is the cookie so important?” When you’re one of the writers of a story sometimes it can be hard to remove yourself enough to see the story overall. So after reading their feedbacks, it’s time to go back to the drawing board and rework this treatment again.